| Cris | 06/27/08 06:10 am | 1: Chapter One | Anonymous |
*shudders* Wow. That's incredibly dark. I think you chose a very effective pov. I don't think the story would have been as creepy if it had been from Legolas' pov. (And not knowing how Aragorn fares now heightens the tension. The unknown is almost always scarier and more tension-inducing.) I'm impressed by your narrative choices and the effect of the language you used. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing. |
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| fiery star | 06/12/08 02:28 pm | 1: Chapter One | Signed |
*shivers* welll.....that was....extremely disturbing. but in a good way of course !!! poor legolas !!! and poor estel !!!! your writing style is very good, those final few lines at the end really scared me!!! congrats on that, usually scary stories have absolutely no effect on me, but your's sure as hell did !!! All the best, Fiery Star |
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| fiery star | 11/06/07 09:55 pm | 1: Chapter One | Anonymous |
| that was brilliant!!! very powerfully written , but poor , poor legolas!!! i loved your ending, the last few scentences were just magic. keep up the great work!! |
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| Elemmire | 11/16/06 03:48 am | 1: Chapter One | Signed |
You must of had a bad start with Legolas. I'm guessing you are not one of his many rabid fans. You seem to enjoy killing him. And Aragorn this time. I must say, you wield the death-pen better than I can touch it. I may have enjoyed it if it wasn't so cruel! *whines* Well... *g* maybe I did enjoy it a little bit. Ok, it was good and evil. I do enjoy torturing the Two, but I don't much kill them. Not my swing. Guess it's yours, and that's fine... unless you have something against Legolas. (Your use of "aye" is a little awkward)
Elemmírë Star-Sheen, Star of Awakening
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