Ok, nice ending. Perfect... ah, no. I was more than a trifle confused at many situations in this. I enjoyed most, but it had a flavour of lack of care. I have to say it quelled all questions, but also alerted me to some sloppiness. Over all, it was enough, but not stunning. Yet I will bereading more!

Elemmire 

Goody! I think this may be my favourite chapter yet, though I think it would have added to the appeal, if you didn't start off telling us who was the character. Other than that, my critique is limited to what I have mentioned before. I am glad that you had Elrond say the title (that is always good), and call both sons... even though in my opinon Legolas is older than Elrond by a few hundred years. But that is me, not you.

Elemmire S-S 

O, I like the last line, though it was awkward after Legolas just promised never to abandon Aragorn. You should have filled in a bit more time, to smooth it over, from promise to failure. Perhaps a bit of panic, because he may die of lack of breath and cold. You know, something like that. You also run on your sentences, and words.Likethis. Just something you need to look out for. But I'm still liking the story! On for more! Bring it on, Aussie!

Elemmire 

O dear, what a cold picture you paint! My biggest complaint (yes, I always have one with everybody- even my favourites) is that you said "... cloth he had used to try and staunch the bleeding." Obviously he had not, and yet you said he did. The proper phrase would be "...to try to..." instead of "to try and", for that is just contradicting yourself. I did it all the time until my ada stopped me.
   You showed a clear picture (until the friend came in... but that was good work!) of the scene and problem, enough to get me reading more. Nicely done.

 ~Elemmire