| sushi | 02/20/07 08:18 pm | 1: 1 | Anonymous |
Really loved it - I thought it was very amusing, and showed all the contrasting characters in the fellowship, despite the short length. Have you written anything else? If not, are you going to? (please say yes)
Author's Response: Yes! I don't thing I am every going to write anytheng very long though. Right now I am working one one of Estel when he was very little. Keep an eye out for it! |
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| Elemmire | 11/03/06 06:55 pm | 1: 1 | Anonymous |
So that means I could hop onto your story and continue it? I'm still slightly confused with how a round-robin would work well on here. (But thanks for the definition!) Might I continue it then? I would find it fun.
Ok, plastic is not good, but choppy isn't any better to my eyes. But there is more than a fine line between good and plastic. Build up to a point where you feel certian that your writing isn't plastic, or choppy, then you'll get on someone's favourite list pretty fast. If you are confident in your writing, you're gonna make it seem better. (You can also edit on this- I am so glad!) I would like you to check out my story and tell me if mine is plastic or not. I would be most honoured!
Elemmire Star-Sheen
Author's Response: If you want to continue it, feel free, as long as you leave the first part to me. You are right about, the choppy vr. plastic thing, but it is much easyer to smooth out a story out than to, ugnh...un-plastic it. So, I kneed some help, TUA NIN!! so to all you people who like to give advice, drop me a line! And about the Round-Robin there is a good example of one the Little Women, in the chapter Camp Laurence, I think. any way, Toodles! mellon nin, may the hair on you toes never grow shorter! oops, wrong species. but you get the point |
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| Elemmire | 10/31/06 12:43 am | 1: 1 | Anonymous |
Sorry if that review was confusing... the formatting I had was taken out. Most have been the computer I used! *shrugs* Sorry 'bout that!
Author's Response: it was a bit confusing, but I am used to deciphering confusing things. It is an Art. My respond was all thats mooth either.
Author's Response: I mean smooth. like mooth with an 's'. lol |
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| Elemmire | 10/31/06 12:08 am | 1: 1 | Signed |
Hmmm... it was a stroke of genius, the plot, but as the afore review stated, your spelling is not overly well. It isn't really *incorrect*, mostly the wrong word (such as seem to seam, or steal to steel). If you are in want of advice, I give mine freely, assuming that you will recieve it with a light heart if only to make clearer your love of Legolas and or Aragorn. (And if you like giving advice, I *love* getting it, even should it come laced with dislike of my writing)
First thing I would address is the format. Choose either using spaces between paragraphs, or indent. It makes you as a writer seem more caring, and your writing neater. Though I like your view of a Dwarf- his thoughts are Dwarvish all the way! But you also confused me. Your flow was rather choppy. (Not that mine is ever perfect...) If you truly want some honest, humble advice -to apply in your writing-, I would be pleased to help in anyway I might. And if you want to give advice, I know I could use some! Or if you would like a good read, I have some of the best stories *ever* in my Fav Stories list. Pentangle is a dream!
Elemmírë, Star of Awakening
P.S. By the way... what in Arda is a roundrobin? I can't figure it out! *whining* Heeelpppp! (Check out "Belly Butter" on here! It is AWESOME! A real laugh!) I hope you don't mind me stoppin' by!
Author's Response: Thanks Elemmire, I love advice too. But I am not very good at giving it. Yes, simmilies are hard, there are the only kind of word that spell check doesn't check. 's anoying. And it took me only about a day to write it, so it was choppy, but I fear over writting things, because they get so plastic. A round-robin, as way of telling a story, some one makes up the first paragraph or what ever, then another person makes unanother and so on. They are fun! As long as you don't have too many whackos in it. Feel free to stop by any time! |
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| Linnath | 10/27/06 08:22 pm | 1: 1 | Anonymous |
Very very good! Your writing keps improving! Your spelling, on the other hand . . . . would you like a beta? ;-) Luv ya Lis!♥
Author's Response: Thanky you sister, I would love a beta, as long as you keep it to spelling, and STAY OFF MY EMAIL ACOUNT!!!!! *snarl* see you later! Mee |
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