| Michelle | 05/04/09 11:00 pm | 2: Chapter 1 - Foreboding | Signed |
You're not giving your poor readers (or characters) a chance to settle comfortably in the story, huh? That's quite a way to start your tale - and it sets the tone quite convincingly. It all looks quite desperate at the moment and I suppose you'll only make it worse for them in the near future! The first paragraph was amazing, by the way. Going from the peaceful description of the landscape straight to the battle was a clever idea!
Author's Response: Thanks, Michelle! No, I don't give the readers nor the characters much chance for a peaceful start, do I? LOL I like to dive straight into the action when possible. It was fun to play off the peaceful surroundings against the ugly evil of the orcs... I imagine quite often the events taking place were quite a contrast to the beauty of Arda (well, except in Mordor, of course). And yes, um, without actually giving out any spoilers, things do get worse, by and by. Thanks for the review! |
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| Mirach | 04/28/09 11:06 pm | 2: Chapter 1 - Foreboding | Signed |
A touching beginning, first the mention of Mallor in the letter, and now this. The fate can be cruel, can't it?
Author's Response: It definitely can be, especially with the hard lives that the Dunedain led. Death was something that likely occured far too often, and likely wasn't anything Aragorn ever reconciled himself to accepting. And it's doubly hard when it's the youngest like that. Thanks for the review! |
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| Eli and Roisin | 02/07/09 06:02 pm | 2: Chapter 1 - Foreboding | Anonymous |
I'm leaving you a combined review from Roisin and I. Roisin loves all the showing an says it makes her feel like she's really there. We both love the action and how you portray Aragorn. It was sad how Aragorn had to say goodbye to his friend. We both liked this a lot
Author's Response: Hey, combined reviews are accepted! *grin* I'm glad you're both enjoying this so far. Yes, it was a rough chapter for Aragorn, wasn't it? I'm glad especially that you felt like you were there... I like to try to make it feel like a complete world when I write, one that the reader feels completely immersed in, so it's always gratifying to hear someone say they felt they were "there". Thanks for the review! |
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