This is an excellent piece of writing. Your unique POV with dialogue and thought carrying the weight of the story is very compelling. I like the variety of tones that you encompass - serious, worried, lighthearted, etc. It's like watching someone sketch a picture where each line is a well defined bit that works with the others to create and beautiful picture. I hope you are still writing, Cairistoiona. I look forward to reading more stories from you.
Author's Response: Thank you, KyMahalei! I'm so glad you enjoyed this... it was written for the National Quality Writing Month, where the idea was to write 100 quality words each day. I started it without a very clear idea of where it might go and it ended up working perfectly as a sort of prequel to my longer story, "At Hope's Edge". Writing in 100, 200 and 300 word bursts was fun, and I did really want to show how dialogue alone can really carry a scene, or a story. I'm glad you found it worked well. :) And yes, I am still writing! I'll have another story up in a month or so, a multi-chapter one. I have a few "non-angst" and "non-perilous" stories that weren't suitable for this site at Stories of Arda as well. Thanks again for the lovely review! |
