GOOD! Am glad that some one is finnaly doing a good story with Gilrean in it. You have stared out the story well, however there are some thing that could edited out. not bad, or nesissarily boring stuff, just things that have no use to your story, that I can see.Like the part about Gilreans age. And I have found that it is best to be as brief as possible. that keeps the story tight and together, you know. Anyway, other than that, I liked it very much! |
