| Amarok | 07/03/08 02:25 pm | 1: Missing | Signed |
That was a nice 'what if'. I liked it a lot already when I read it the first time, and now again :-).
It's almost funny in its tragic to 'hear' Aragorn reason out why he can't find Legolas at first. But of course he then insists to follow him, instead of going to Helm's Deep with Theoden, once he realizes what happened. Poor Gimli, though, having to stay behind. And it's fascinating - uhm and for parts almost heartbreaking - to see it all from a different (human, in this case ;-) ) perspective, and not only with a different person. Your Brego is a great horse, too :-).
What really made me laugh was this dialouge:
" “You decided to fall off a cliff,” Aragorn informed him with a perfectly straight face.
“I decided nothing of this sort,” Legolas replied without thinking, his voice sounding indignant in spite of its weakness. "
Grin...
This story has all the great elements the scenes in the movie had, and then some more :-).
Author's Response: I'm very glad you liked this story! It was only my second attempt at writing fanfiction, and there are probably quite some flaws in it, but I still like it. It was a lot of fun to write, and it was one of those rare stories that don't require conscious effort but simply insist on being written. ;-) I always wanted Legolas to go searching for Aragorn in the movies, so I had Aragorn insist on finding Legolas in this AU version. I really enjoyed exchanging their roles like that, though I have no idea where that inspiration came from. Gimli really wasn't happy to be left behind - I actually considered taking him along, but finally decided it would complicate things far too much. I'm happy you liked my version of Brego! I think I like your Brego a bit more, because writing the story from his POV gave him so much personality. :) Hehe, I quite enjoyed writing that dialogue. ;-) *blushes* Thank you so much for the compliment, and for your review! :) *hugs* Tinu |
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| Mairi | 12/12/07 09:11 pm | 2: Searching | Anonymous |
I think that was just the right place to end a chapter in. The last line might be more striking as its own paragraph, though.
Author's Response: I'm very glad you liked how and where I ended this chapter! Hm, I just looked at the chapter again and I think you may be right about that last sentence. I'll correct it right away. Thank you very much for the suggestion and for your review! :) Tinu |
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| Mairi | 12/11/07 09:04 pm | 1: Missing | Anonymous |
Very nice beginning to the story as a whole. In the first paragraph, though, you start two sentences with the, which is a pain.
Author's Response: Hi! :) I'm very glad you enjoyed the beginning of my story! Repetitions at the beginnings of successive sentences always tend to be a problem - I usually leave them in there if I don't find a better solution, though. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! Tinu |
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| Nimirie | 08/04/06 08:58 pm | 2: Searching | Anonymous |
Very interesting idea -- I like it a lot! Please write more!
Author's Response: Hi! :) I'm glad you liked it! I am writing a sequel to this story, but I will need some time to finish it. Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! :) Tinu |
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| lwarren | 07/25/06 02:43 am | 3: Hope | Anonymous |
"He could feel a silly smile spreading on his face, but he wasn't able to help it." Yes, exactly! I know how he feels! What a relief! Another excellent chapter, what with rescue and comfort and healing and traded insults! I loved Aragorn fussing at Legolas about bringing him to the point of talking to horses in the midst of retrieving a lost elf...and Legolas' immediate, if somewhat weak, comeback of "Not...lost." :-) That's my elf! Never let them see you sweat...or grimace...or bleed. (Well, hardly ever!) The patching up of one slightly banged up Prince was well done, and the ride back to Helm's Deep was extremely tense, what with the sight of ten thousand or so orcs on the march, but the friendship and love shared by these two continues to shine through even the darkest moments. Great story...just great! I thoroughly enjoyed reading every word of it! Linda
Author's Response: Hehe, it seems you survived the story! ;-) I thought the two of them really needed some comfort and healing and bantering after all this angst... and of course Legolas had to choose that moment for waking up! *g* He really could not take such a comment without protest, proud as he is. ;-) I think it is just wonderful that such a friendship can make you hold on to hope in spite of 10 000 Uruk-hais marching against you... I'm very glad you loved my story, thank you so much for your wonderful reviews! :) Tinu |
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| lwarren | 07/25/06 02:25 am | 2: Searching | Anonymous |
Go Aragorn! Estel, indeed! I am so glad he never gave up his search and was rewarded in the end. You do an excellent job of portraying his doubts and fears and thoughts as he searches, coming right up to the edge of hope, but never losing it completely. Excellent use of Bregod, too! I also have thoroughly enjoyed your Gimli - he has become a strong piece of this friendship in such a short time, and I am so pleased to see him and his grumpy self laying claim to both the Elf and Man as friends. Great stuff...I am off the chapter 3! Linda (he is only unconscious, isn't he? *hopeful look...still sniffing*)
Author's Response: In this case it was really good that Aragorn is so stubborn. I'm glad you liked the way I described his feelings and thoughts, I really did not give him an easy time. ;-) I enjoyed writing Brego and Gimli. I loved how you expressed that: "his grumpy self laying claim to both the Elf and Man as friends". That's perfectl, just the way I see him in this story (and elsewhere). Thank you so much for another review, I'm always glad when people fear for my characters! Hehe. Tinu :) |
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| lwarren | 07/25/06 02:15 am | 1: Missing | Anonymous |
oh my! What a wonderful turn-about! I also wrote a story of this particular scene, from Legolas' point of view called "Le Abdollen". I think I like this better! :-) You have absolutely caught Aragorn here - his determination, and that strong, unbreakable link of friendship/brotherhood I have always believed existed between the Man and the Elf. Wonderful! I am off to chapter 2! Linda (gee, I hope you didn't kill him :-( ....*sniff*)
Author's Response: Hi! :) You know, I always wanted to write a story where Legolas (or Legolas and Gimli) goes after Aragorn after he had fallen from that cliff. I never liked it that they left him behind in the movies... Well, somehow I ended up writing about Legolas falling from the cliff instead and Aragorn going after him. *g* Your story sounds very interesting, I think I will have to try and find it. :) I'm glad you liked my description of Aragorn, and I believe in that "strong, unbreakable link of friendship/brotherhood" between them, too! Hehe - I'm not likely to kill my elf off, I enjoy tormenting him far too much! *g* Thank you very much for reading and reviewing! :) Tinu |
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| Pentangle | 08/12/05 10:04 pm | 1: Missing | Anonymous |
| I enjoyed this so much at Teitho! I just read it again, here. Well-written and I particularly enjoyed that Aragorn would not abandon Legolas. Author's Response: My first review on this site! Thank you! I'm glad to hear that you already enjoyed this story at the Teitho contest. I never liked it that they left Aragorn behind in the movies, so I decided this would not happen in my story. ;-) |
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