I've enjoyed this story so very much!! I've had so little time lately to read fanfic (let alone longer stuff), so this story put me right back into the mood why I love LOTR fic. I could read endlessly about Aragorn's adventures in far-off countries, but that you decided to tell the story from Hakim's point of view gave the fic an interesting twist. And of course, the moment when he finally realizes that the King is actually Dakheel was priceless. I was basically cheering:)

I have not much to say, after the brilliant review from Ellyn and Ichbins - they said it all. So, thank you very much for a wonderful story and I'm looking forward to the sequel! It is really sad, that some stories must come to an end.

A condign end for a brilliant story. I hate that it is over and that you don't let me "watch" the meal of Aragorn, Hakim and his son, but I think it is (unfortunately) the right ponit to end. I am glad it was a happy end, I had always thoght there would be a happy end, but I sometimes shook with nerves in sympathy for your OCs and Aragorn. (You didn't made it easy for them.) In this chapter (for the firsth time in this story) Aragorn's behavior was somehow strange to me, you explained it well, so that it was in line with Aragorn's charakter well enough, but I cannot imagine his little "show" with Hakim has had that much impact on the Lords. However, he is much more wise than me, so probably it did ;-) Anyways, I somehow liked feeling the tension that was nearly visible in this room and feeling the shakiness Hakim probebly felt, altogh he did great. Oh, and I liked Aragorn's speek and the irony of this one Lord talking about stubborn people who wouldn't change their ways. The sad thing is, that this (like your entire text) is so realistic. Stubborn people complaining about stubborn people, war-used people afraid of peace and people in war afraid of each other (and may hating each other) to much to even think rational... this could have played in nowadays world as well - which is another reason to love your story. Not that every story must have a moral or lesson - your story is defenitly worth reading it, just because it is so exciting and your OCs are so great and Aragorn is so true to himself - but that it could set in this world as well (instead of middle-earth) with little changes is a great bonus.

I might write confused, what I need to say is: Thank you very much for a wonderful story. I love it!

And I look forward to the sequel.

Well, my only objection to this epilogue is that it's too short! Yes, yes, I know, it's only epilogue, and right now Aragorn has other duties so he can't chat with an old friend, but nevertheless, I wish this was longer!

Thank you for this wonderful journey.

Yes, while still reading, I wondered if you'd describe Aragorn's adventures. :)

I like the chapter, especially the last part. There is not much happening - only Hakim's general description of the events, but I love the way you did it. There is some special melancholic, sad tone in it that I like.

Thank you so much for a beautiful written story! 'Ich bins' review said it all. I especially liked the part about the rumors coming up from the south, showing very clear that Dakheel was alive and 'making a difference'. Looking forward to your update and the next story.

Thoroughly great chapter! (Even though you let us wait once again for a talk or something between Aragorn and Hakim, how could you?!) You put the story strings well together.

It somehow made me feel really good, that Hakim tried to free Aragorn, but he didn't want to. I somehow expected, that he would be sold, but able to flee afterwards, however that is so much better. Now we see Hakim finding the strenght and heart to help Aragorn - not in impulse, but knowing what it might bring to him and that he is acting against his fathers wish - and we see Aragorn being a strong hero, who does all this willingly (more or less) for his aim, rather than a broken man who get forced to be a slave. Oh, I cannot even tell you how much confort this means to me (probably to Hakim as well^^). But I don't want to get obsessed with this topic, as there are so much other great things I have to praise. 

I like how you told us, what happend after they seperated. You didn't tell us to much about Hakim, yet we know what is important (for the story) and you told it well. And how you told us about Aragorn (even thogh it was probably hard, because Hakim is the narrator and he doesn't know to much) was very well solved. I can sy myself, that Aragorn did well, but you didn't force Hakim to be there and see something or do something else unrealstic. (But I would love to hear more about Aragorn's time with the slaves, I will keep an eye on your profile) Oh, and how you put in how Hakim gets the sword and Aragorn gets his stuff back was very well done too.

And there, as well as in the other chapters (but I think I forgot to mention it last time) are so much especially good sentences, said by Aragorn or Hakim. I feel that in this chaptere there are more of them than before, wise and somehow grave statements which gave a tone of...severity especially to this chapter, at least at parts. And we could see Hakim's development pretty good. At firsth he was more or less a boy, keen but ingenuous, but when Aragon leaves he understands a great lot and has somehow matured. We see it in the way he acts and talks and it has influence on the style of the story, because he is telling it, and I think it's great how you captured this. Also the difference of the way "old Hakim" is seeing and describing his surroundings and the way "young Hakim" (especially at the beginning) is seeing the world is pretty good worked out. There is no to big gap, as it is still the same person and he is making the narration now in form of recollections, but you can get a difference (or I am imagine it, which is just as fine as long as I like it ;-)

I'm looking forward to the epilogue and to more stories! (I think I could read thousands of this/your stories...)

What a great story!

Your OCs are great, they are all so... "lifelike". Most stories with people from Harad have just the "evil" Harads and maby or one or two "heroic victims" of their own people. Your charakters are neither oft that. They are not perfect, but not bad either. I like how the mother acts and how her attitude towards "the foreigner" chances. I like the father and how in-depth his charakter is - knowing his desperation and his "good sides", you do not see him just as evil person, even thogh it is still no excuse for selling somebody (even the word selling sounds incredibly worng here). I like Hakim an I like reading his thoghts about everything and especially about Aragorn (and I like, that he became healer- if I got that right- he should tell Elessar^^). And I think I like Kali most, even thogh we do not know that much about her, as she is still so little, but you described her acting well and she is cute. Somehow I feel as if this whole family were real.

You (and/or Hakim) also described Aragorn great. Seeing him through the eyes of an Haradrim is really interessting and Aragorn's acting and speeking (heroic, but not superhuman) is how I always imaginated him (which is very importent to me).

The content is also very good. You show us perspectives of Harad, which we didn't had and tell us a little bit more about Aragorn, but mostly you tell the story of a family and especially a youg boy, finding himself in a situation none thoght he/they would ever be and that is maybe changing a lot. Even thogh the situation in Harad is not that good at the moment it was enjoyable to read about this family and thrilling. And there is this "other" little story about Hakim in Gondor and it is a really exciting story and how you put that together with the flashbacks and so on was great.

Oh, I have been fevered waiting for the moment they meet and recognice each other, even thogh I wanted the story to last as long as possible. I could have read so much more about Aragorn there. But I think you chosed a good story length nevertheless.

What I wanted to tell you with this terribly long Reviw is: I love your story! (I could have just wrote that, but now you know or sure that everything is great.) 

I can't wait for Sunday, I want to read about them talking and... oh, I'm so agog. 

Kind regards from Austria! (where I come from, which is the reason for the bad English, sorry by the way)

Until the next chapter;-)

I can hardly believe you can solve this fine story in only one last chapter. To me you can write on and on and....

This is great. I can't wait for Sunday!

very good written !

'This king of theirs seems to have a lot of names.'  lol

Poor Hakim, seeing his friend chained and unable to comfort or help. No wonder he thought he was crying.

And so very true of Aragorn to spend comfort even in a miserable position.

Hope you update soon, can hardly wait to read further...

I knew it! I knew Kalima's wound would get worse because her mother had stitched it! Ok, ok, "things can go wrong anyway", as Aragorn politely put it, but we know the reason for the problems that appeared, don't we?

I read this chapter "in one breath", as we say in Croatian.

Wow..., I just love this story. It's written in a great way, Aragorn is wonderfully strong and wise, and the family members are all real characters, very believable and likeable. Also I love that there are two tracks of action and am curious how it will come togehter in the end. Looking very much forward to the next chapters...

'Dakheel turned slightly green.  I laughed softly.  Foreigners had such strange ideas about food.'  I just can repeat myself... this is so well written! And the tension is building from chapter to chapter. I can hardly wait to read more and what will happen.  

It is really sad, and shocking, and terrible, what one "human being" can do to another.

Excellent writing, as always. ;)