You fooled me at first ;) Looking back, I see that the places where I thought you went off canon, was clues Well done.
The only critique would be that you succeeded too well in your trickery; the narrator does not sound like an Elf to me. While I do understand why, it would have made the story even better if you had managed to make the voice an believable elf, and a believable Aragorn at the same time. Because I thought it did not quite sound as Aragorn either, at the first reading.
Of course, it is rather difficult, but at least I, when I began reading, was so sure this would be about Aragorn and Arwen (from both the characters listed, and the opening) that I did not even think it would be someone else, even if the voice was off to me. I thought it was just done to different interpetations of the character.
Author's Response: I have to admit that I didn't try to sound like anyone - not an elf, not a man. I didn't think about it at all, actually. My only goal was to write a short vignette (and it is short, indeed :) ) in which I'd fool my readers. :) Yes, the story is sad from the elf's POV, because his love is unrequited, but I hope that readers will laugh at least a little in the end, realizing the truth.
I also have to admit that I am not sure how an elf would sound. *unsure*
I talked to Michele before posting this, about listing the characters. To be 100% precise, I'd have to name all three: Aragorn, Arwen and OMC. But that would reveal too much, wouldn't it? I wanted to keep "the secret" to the end. :) So I asked Michele if I could only list Aragorn and Arwen, and she answered it was ok.
Thanks a lot for reading and reviewing! :) | 