I enjoyed this chapter more than the second. It flowed well, and kept to a steady pace. I (my fault, not yours) found it hard to take in Legolas speak so dismissively of Aragorn, but (out of dialog) have Gimli refered to as 'brother'. But, hey, that's me, you've done nothing wrong. (Though I'm hoping that was just overlooked on your part, not purposeful.) I loved it when you had Gimli call Legolas 'lad' - it brought to my attention, so acutely, that Legolas is hundreds upon hundreds of years older than Gimli! Your words were sharp, to the point, and easy to slip into. As his eyes glazed over, one last thought ran through his mind. He was truly blessed with a very good friend. O, such a good line! Love it! This chapter, though serious, was greatly entertaining, and again, I must only applaud! Elemmire
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked this chapter. I think they get better and better as they go, as I developed a lot through this story. When I first wrote this, I was still fairly new to fan fiction and did not realize so many believed Aragorn and Legolas were like brothers before the quest. Personally, I don't feel that from the books. I think they probably had never met before Aragorn brought Gollum to Mirkwood...Tolkien himself points out the great friendship between Legolas & Gimli and that is what I was trying to portray in this story. BUT I have since in my stories changed that fact and have Legolas and Aragorn friends since Aragorn was a child....and have yet to figure out how to rewrite the beginning of this story to reflect it. There is great love between Legolas & Aragorn and you will see it in future chapters. But remember, Aragorn gets married, becomes king, has a kingdom to restore...that's a lot for one person! Friendships are going to change...Legolas & Gimli travel together and do the bachelor thing and draw very close. I know when I married, my friendships, even my closests ones, with single friends changed dramatically. I don't deal with that issue in this story, but in the sequel. But I think in later chapters you will be happy with Legolas & Aragorn's friendship. *deep breath* Did I mention I'm also a big fan of Thundera Tiger and she influenced me greatly when it comes to Legolas and Gimli? *grin* Again, I'm glad you liked this chapter! I love Legolas and Gimli's friendship! NiRi |
